Wednesday, February 8, 2012

Wahoo! Dialog on Day Two of Blogfest!





First: My first official post as a Dojo Leader goes up today!  So click HERE to view it :)  Thanks guys!!!


So if I didn't comment on your day one post, that means I didn't read it!  And you must yell at me and get me over to your post!  I did two rounds (one Monday morning and the other Tuesday morning), but there are a lot of links here (and they keep going up!  Eep!), so I may have missed someone.  I do not want to miss you!  So please please tell me if I missed your post!


Okay...

Dialog is my favorite!!!  Squee!!!

So I'm cheating.  It's a little over the word count, but hey!  I can't win anyway!  And if I did, I doubt critiquing my own query would do much good, lol.

Here we go!


“You ready for this, Zo?”

“Whatever, I’m gonna wipe the floor with you and you know it!”

“You have to answer every question right on this card or you’re goin’ back to the dungeons!”

“Hey! When was the last time I lost this game?”

“Last time we played.  I believe I whooped your butt.”

“Just ‘cause you rolled sixes the whole time.”

“You keep tellin’ yourself that.”

“Stop stalling and read the dang questions.  And then get ready for the victory dance!”

“In Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire, who gave Harry the idea to use-”

“Dobby. Unless you’re counting the movie.  Then it was Neville. Next question.”

“You sure Gillyweed was what I was gonna say?”

“Yes. Next question.”

“Cheater.”

“Whatever! You’re jealous!”

“Fine, smart-ass. In Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix, what one word did Harry use to describe the kiss with-”

“Wet. Next question. And when I get it right, you have to keep your end of the deal.”

“It’s a tough one. You willing to keep up the bet? ‘Cause when you get it wrong, then you’ll be the one-”

“You don’t scare me.”

“Alright… what actor portrayed the young Snape in Harry Potter and the-”

“Benedict Clarke.”

“Oh, sorry… you’re wrong.”

“What? No I’m not.”

“Yup, you are.”

“Let me see that card.”

“Whoops!  Back in the deck.”

“Zak! I so had that right and you know it! Stop shaking your head!”

“Ouch get off me!”

“We had a deal.  Take ‘em off!”

“Okay, okay.  But I can’t do that when you’re on top of me.”

“Alright, but no running away! And I'm turning around. Be quick about it.”


“Okay, now what do you want me to do with them?”

“Put them on your head.”

“Sick, Zo.”

“Come on. Deal’s a deal. I would’ve done the same thing.”

“Yeah, but a thong is a lot smaller than these.”

“Doesn’t matter.”

“Okay, now what?”

“Now we go for a nice long walk around the block.”

“I’m gonna have some serious chaffing.”

“That’s what you get for doubting my Harry Potter knowledge.”

Okay everyone!  Have fun hopping around :)  I look forward to reading all of your dialogs :)

57 comments:

Jade Hart said...

YAY :) I'm first commentor. Bahahaha. lol
My imagination is running away with me Cassie, what EXACTLY did he put on his head? lol. Loving naked Zak. :)

Griffinclaw said...

Ahahaha, I love it!! Great job! ^.^

Danielle B. said...

This is fantastic! I love me some HP and your characters sound amazing! I want to invite them over for lunch!

Lisa said...

Hee hee! I LIKE games like that. :) Nice job showing what you mean without extra surrounding words.

Tara Tyler said...

ha ha ha! i'd be so embarrassed, from my lack of hp knowledge AND the consequences...
great slice!

Damyanti said...

Would love to get to know your characters even better!







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Deana said...

I've said it once and I'll say it again. I love Zoe! You're characters just scream VOICE. Awesome dialogue! And thanks for the blogfest. It is so much fun:)

Stephen Tremp said...

That was a lot of fun! I finally got around the reading the entire HP series in about two months at the end of last summer and am going through it a second time. Can't believe I waited so long.

Rusty Trombone said...

Marvellous. And that's from someone allergic to HP. It's the wee things that tell us so much :o) xxx

Grumpy Bulldog, Media Mogul said...

Yes, what did he put on his head? My imagination will run wild with that.

Cristina said...

your people are soooo funny!!!!!!

Cassie Mae said...

Jade: Haha! You picture whatever you want Jade. :)

Griffinclaw: Thank you!

Danielle: Oh! We'll all get together for a HP party!

Lisa: Thank you. It was a lot tougher than I thought. I almost put He laughed, she laughed almost every other sentence! Haha!

Tara: We need to get you some HP edumacation. :)

Damyanti: One more day with them :)

Deana: Oh! I love Zoe too! Thank you so much! This made my day :)

Stephen: Uh, ya! I'm on read 27 through the series. :)

Rusty: You're allergic to HP??? Oh my gosh how sad!

Grumpy: Let it run wild! Haha.

Cristina: Thank you :)

JoLynne Lyon said...

Should I be scared that these two know so much about Harry Potter? Or that I knew all the answers, too? Good job!

Briane P said...

That was incredible -- I'm jealous of your ability to convey personality through dialogue like that. I don't have that much personality WHEN I TALK IN REAL LIFE. Now all my characters feel to me like they're just cardboard cutouts, except for the ones that are cardboard cutouts, which, weirdly, feel to me like they are pastry chefs in an underrated French restaurant located just outside of Nashville, Tennessee.

But probably everyone has days like that.

It was underwear he put on his head, right? But the big mystery is... WHOSE? (Or is it WHOMS?)

Briane P said...

Oh. I put my pathetic attempt at dialogue up here:

http://www.thinkingthelions.com

ilima said...

Omigosh, Cassie. That was awesome. I can always count on a good laugh to start my day right by stopping by your blog. Well done. :)

Emily R. King said...

Nerds playing games. AWESOME! :D

Joshua said...

Strip Harry Potter Trivia? I'm game.

Elizabeth Seckman said...

Excellent. And informative. Well done.

Morgan said...

CASS! I'm seriously having so much fun reading all of these snippets! What a fun blogfest! And yours was fun, nice work! <3

Cassie Mae said...

JoLynne: No, you should be uber proud!

Briane: Dude, you are the nicest person ever! And I already read your entry and it was awesome! You got nothin' to worry about :)

ilima: <3 you!

Emily: I actually took these questions off of the HP trivia game I have, lol. :)

Joshua: The best kind of HP trivia... depending on who you play with.

Elizabeth: Informative? Oh with all the trivia? Gotcha! :)

Morgan: Everyone's entries are awesome! I'm having a blast reading them all :)

Kyra Lennon said...

As a fellow Potter dork, I got quite a kick out of this! It made me chuckle all the way through - excellent stuff!

Kelley said...

This. Was. AWESOME!!! I'm so glad you picked 'funny Zoe' to do this dialog with. This was such a great interaction. I think this should be the Epilogue of your story!!! ;)

Angela Cothran said...

Oh I'm so with Kelley! EPILOGUE!!! I love Zak and Zoe :)

Johanna Garth said...

How can you go wrong with HP fan dialogue? You just can't!! Great job Cassie!

Sara said...

Love it. I am guessing he had to put his underwear on his head.

Hilarious.

Clare said...

Oh my god, that was hilarious!

I love the friendship you've described between Zoe and Zak.

And as a fellow Harry Potter dork I can completely identify with this scene.

Excellent stuff. Thanks for sharing.

Hope Roberson said...

So funny! I was wondering what was getting taken off ;) Reminds me of a game of truth or dare in college, I'll have to tell you about it sometime :)

Carol Kilgore said...

Funny!

Madeleine Maddocks said...

ROFL! The devil's in the details! :O)

Tyrean Martinson said...

Funny! Loved how she knew the questions and the answers!

Jackie said...

LOVE this! So creative and funny. :D

Cassie Mae said...

Kyra: Potter dorks are awesome!

Kelley: Aw, epilogue, huh? Sounds like a plan, lol.

Angie: Thanks! Vote number two for epilogue. I will have to throw in some action and internalization though, just sayin'. ;)

Johanna: You can't go wrong!

Sara: Yes, you are exactly right. :)

Clare: Another Potter Dork! We must unite and conquer the world! :)

Hope: Um... yes, you email that story to me right now :)

Carol: Thanks!

Madeleine: Details in the dialog... totally glad I got that across :)

Tyrean: Always. She rocks at that game!

Jackie: Thank you!

Amber said...

loved it. You totally get a sense of their connection. And I loved the boxers on the head, although-maybe he's a briefs kinda guy. Is it bad that this brings back memories for me? haha I have totally had a couple of moments where I played for embarassing things-clothes inside out and stuff like that. I'm feeling very connected to Zoe.

J. A. Bennett said...

You are sooo funny! I loved that! Bestseller material I'm tellin' ya!

Ashley Nixon said...

LOL. I loved the HP trivia!! Great job! :D

Gwen said...

Strip HP Trivia? I've done strip monopoly before, but this is totally better. ^_^ Granted, I know peeps really obsessed with this game and I'd lose. Every time. Great dialog and plot Cassie!

Jess said...

Haha that was really funny! I'm still wondering what he put on his head, lol! Loved it!

Sari Webb said...

People are looking at me funny because I'm sitting in the office having a bit of a giggle to myself. Loved this!

Leigh Covington said...

bahahahaha! Oh my freaking hilarious! How do you come up with this stuf? Honestly? Love your humor! Love the characters too :)

Cortney Pearson said...

Lol, loved this, Cassie!!!

Clarissa Draper said...

That's so funny in an odd sort of way. Great use of dialogue.

Cassie Mae said...

Amber: Awesome! And I was picturing boxers when I wrote this, but now I'm thinking briefs, lol. But they would definitely be Star Wars or Spiderman underwear :)

JA: Oh you totally rock!

Ashley: Thank you :)

Gwen: Strip monopoly? How many items of clothing were you wearing??? Must've been a lot to last through that game :)

Jess: Underwear :P

Sari: Lol. Awesome! People look at me funny all the time when I'm reading some blog posts. :)

Leigh: Um... this is just the story of my life, lol. I'm kidding btw!

Cortney: Thank you!

Clarissa: Thanks :)

Dianne Gardner said...

You are funny!!

Carrie Butler said...

Hah! Sounds fun. :D

Sharon Bayliss said...

Super cute. I want to play strip Harry Potter trivia right now!

Emily Moir said...

I love that they're doing Harry Potter trivia!

Aldrea Alien said...

Harry Potter trivia ... I'd totally fail. I've only seen some of the movies and never read the books.
That Zo ... way too hyper for me.

Hywela Lyn said...

Ooh this was so much fun I was visualising the whole thing in my head, LOL!

Justin W. Parente said...

Entertaining the whole way through. Thanks for sharing.

DL Hammons said...

You're right...dialogue is a strength for you! Very nicely done. :)

Sarah Ahiers said...

Yay! I'm so glad i'm not the only rule bender. And also, YAY for HP trivia! Loved this, i definitely got a taste for their voices.

Cassie Mae said...

Dianne: Thanks :)

Carrie: HP trivia is ALWAYS fun :)

Sharon: Lol. Oh my gosh, giggling my butt off.

Emily: Harry Potter Rocks :)

Aldra: That's me with Star Trek trivia. I only know some of the answers and have to go on dumb luck the rest of the time.

Hywela: Thank you!

Justin: Thanks! :)

DL: Dialog is my favorite part of writing! I'm not sure it's a strength, but I think it's cuz I talk so much and I talk to myself all the time, it just comes out when I write :)

Sarah: Haha! I figure I'll bend the rules cuz I can't win anyway :) But I was only just over the word limit :)

Juliana L. Brandt said...

Lolol! Cassie, this is amazing. I love how many little unexpected twists there are in here. So amazing.

Dialogue is one of my favorites, too :)

Amber said...

I know there's a ton of these...just dropping you a line to say, "Hey, you and Angie haven't been to my 'dialogue' post yet." So hop on over :) please :D

Donna Hole said...

That was a lot of fun Cassie :) These two know each other so well, and they seem great friends. Love develops from such closeness, and it generally sticks forever.

Great character voices.

I took a blogger sick day yesterday, so I'm seriously behind in reading excerpts. I plan to catch up over the weekend though.

.........dhole

Cassie Mae said...

Juliana: Thanks so much! Dialog is really the best part about writing :)

Amber: Yup, just made my way over there. sorry for the delay! I've been super busy today :)

Donna: Oh I hope you feel better soon! Healthy vibes being sent your way :)

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